65 SUCCESSFUL HARVARD BUSINESS SCHOOL APPLICATION ESSAYS SECOND EDITION 65 SUCCESSFUL HARVARD BUSINESS SCHOOL APPLICATION ESSAYS SECOND EDITION With Analysis by the Staff of The Harbus , the Harvard Business School Newspaper 65 SUCCESSFUL HARVARD BUSINESS SCHOOL APPLICATION ESSAYS, SECOND EDITION. Copyright © 2009 by The Harbus News Corporation. All rights reserved. Printed in the United States of America. For information, address St. Martin’s Press, 175 Fifth Avenue, New York, N.Y. 10010.   www.stmartins.com   Library of Congress Cataloging-in-Publication Data   65 successful Harvard Business School application essays : with analysis by the staff of The Harbus , the Harvard Business School newspaper / Lauren Sullivan and the staff of The Harbus. —2nd ed.           p. cm.       ISBN 978-0-312-55007-3       1. Business schools—United States—Admission. 2. Exposition (Rhetoric) 3. Essay—Authorship. 4. Business writing. 5. Harvard Business School. I. Sullivan, Lauren. II. Harbus. III. Title: Sixty-five successful Harvard Business School application essays.       HF1131.A135 2009       808'.06665—dc22 2009012531   First Edition: August 2009   10  9  8  7  6  5  4  3  2  1 CONTENTS       Acknowledgments Introduction   I. DEFINING MOMENT Stacie Hogya Anonymous Anonymous David La Fiura Anonymous Avin Bansal Anonymous Brad Finkbeiner Anonymous   II.UNDERGRADUATE EXPERIENCE John Coleman Maxwell Anderson Lavanya Anantharman Rosita Najmi Faye Iosotaluno Anonymous Rohan Nirody   III.CAREER ASPIRATIONS Jason Kreuziger Anonymous James Reinhart Jemine Rewane Anonymous Apar Kothari Anonymous Anonymous Stephen Cravens Anne Morriss   IV.TYPICAL DAY Anonymous Jay Glaubach Lexie Hallen Benoit-Olivier Boureau Jason Bohle   V. THREE ACCOMPLISHMENTS Anonymous Anonymous Martin Brand Anonymous Anonymous Scott Griffin Daniel Lewis Dale Schilling Erik Johnson   VI. S ETBACK OR FAILURE Chris Withers Eugenia Gibbons John Richard Craig Ellis Irfhan Rawji Thomson Nguy Anonymous Jordan Burton   VII.ETHICALISSUES Anonymous Paul Yeh Rye Barcott Anonymous Adam Heltzer Anonymous Anonymous   VIII.OTHER QUESTION Nathan Dutzmann Anonymous David Zhang John Schmit Jaime Arreola Anonymous AllyIp Anonymous Anonymous Cabin Kim ACKNOWLEDGMENTS       The motivation to create the second edition of 65 Successful Harvard Business School Application Essays came from a recent rise in business school applications. With an abundance of qualified candidates to choose from, admissions officers can be more selective, making admission to top schools even more challenging for applicants. The Harbus , the Harvard Business School weekly student newspaper, recognizes that applicants require up-to-date materials and inspiration to match the current environment. While this book includes the latest application essays, which are updated regularly by the admissions committee, it retains several essays from the first edition of the book because of their uniqueness as well as to reflect typical question topics that may reappear in future admissions’ applications. It is worth noting that this book is created by The Harbus News Corporation, an independent nonprofit entity, not the Harvard Business School. The Harbus contributes profits to a grant-making foundation that supports community organizations and schools in the Boston area. The Foundation to date has awarded over $850,000 in grants to forty organizations that pursue initiatives in education and literacy. The views and opinions expressed in this book do not necessarily reflect those of Harvard Business School, and the references to the school throughout the book do not mean that the school endorses these views or opinions. A huge credit is owed to five contributors from the Class of 2008 and Class of 2009 who helped source the content, select essays, and write critiques and chapter introductions: Aastha Gurbax and Uma Subramanian from the Class of 2008 and Will Boland, Linda Dempah, and Zachary Surak from the Class of 2009. We thank all the HBS students and alumni who kindly shared their personal essays. We would also like to thank the staff of the Harbus, including Lauren Sullivan, Marianne Bakula, and Christie Cuthbert, for their encouragement and support. Lastly, we would be remiss if we did not express our gratitude for assistance from our agent, Katie Boyle, and our editor at St. Martin’s, Matthew Martz. INTRODUCTION       You are inspired, hopeful, accomplished, and eager. You seek personal and professional advancement via an MBA that will prepare you for leadership challenges in any business field. You are aware, however, that Harvard Business School receives about ten thousand applications annually, and you are uncertain how to make your application stand out. We understand. We have been in your shoes. This book seeks to demystify the admissions process for applicants by providing a selective but robust sample of HBS essays that have successfully survived the admissions committee in the past. We aspire to show you a variety of writing styles, essay responses, and applicant backgrounds that have been successful in the past, but there are no foolproof prescriptions, shorts cuts, or magic formulas. There are probably as many perfect application essays as there are applicants. The chosen essays highlight ordinary applicants who have demonstrated potential, vision, integrity, and leadership. While the MBA applicant pool can often swarm with people with business backgrounds, we are positive that this book will also inspire nontraditional applicants because they will realize that there is no such thing as a standard applicant at Harvard Business School. We encourage you to bear in mind that your profession is not what makes the essay special. What makes you special is how you make the big (or small) decisions in life and how they have led to your growth. The only common strain in the successful essays is that applicants have clearly described why each experience is challenging, educational, and transformational. We hope this book motivates you to write great essays by revealing who you really are. Be captivating. Be truthful. Be yourself. When you sit down at a blank computer screen, you may be tempted to think that your experiences to date have been rather pedestrian. You are neither an Olympic gold medalist nor a Pulitzer Prize winner. We hope that the examples in this book will rescue you from this fear. Many of the essays contain simple anecdotes with routine settings that demonstrate the applicant’s maturity, awareness, and potential. Use anecdotes from your life to offer an astute glimpse into your personality, sense of humor, values, thoughtfulness, and all other attributes that will contribute to your success in life and business. Even the most prestigious accomplishment will be deficient if you do not explain why it was important, what you learned from it, and how you have grown because of it. First, make a mental list of the most influential and meaningful events and experiences of your life and begin to map them into your essays, but avoid repetition. While you may want to weave a few over-arching themes in all your essays, use the essays to demonstrate different aspects of your intellectual, emotional, and moral fiber. For instance, if you choose to prove your ability as a competent project manager in one essay, you may wish to discuss a more personal issue like your relationship with your parents or partner in the next. Reach inside yourself for examples of strength, confidence, and accomplishment. In the end, your fundamental objective is to prove that you are greater than the sum of your individual application parts such as your GMAT score, academic transcripts, or professional laurels. While those parts of the application are significant, your essays will allow you to bring your charisma and individuality to life. So, steer clear of cut-and-paste jobs from the resume. Once you map out the essays, you will find the word limit excruciating. Although an obstacle, the word count can help you tell your story more selectively and succinctly. After all, does your employer want you to be unnecessarily long-winded and unfocused? Probably not. The essays included in this book will convince you that you can be poignant in few words. We suggest that you create the first draft without a strict word limit. In the subsequent draft, ask yourself repeatedly: “What is my core message? Does this sentence improve upon or clarify that message?” By doing this, you will be able to distill the key anecdotes and interpretations from a pool of excessive descriptions and unnecessary details. The essays in this book will help you to assess and celebrate your key experiences in a robust fashion. In the analyses, we consider each author’s motivations, accomplishments, and shortcomings and assess whether they communicate them compellingly and credibly through their choices of content, structure, and style. We have selected essays that deliver the author’s message in a way that stood out from the pack—your ultimate goal as an applicant. To do the same, concentrate on the frank analysis that follows each essay. The constructive suggestions, embedded in the analyses, will enable you to avoid common pitfalls and convert a good set of application essays into a remarkable one. We believe that you will find the sixty-five essays that follow to be useful examples, but remember to treat them only as examples. Let your uniqueness shine through your own essays and not through imitation of the essays in this book. We cannot promise you that this book will get you into Harvard Business School. There are books, Web sites, and admission consultants that promise such things, falsely. We do not. With this book, however, you will have the tools to get the job done and truly own your business career, so good luck! Aastha Gurbax Publisher, Harbus News Corporation, Class of 2008 On behalf of Harbus News Corporation I. DEFININGMOMENT                             Discuss a defining experience in your leadership development. How did this experience highlight your strengths and weaknesses as a leader?   This question may appear quite daunting. By default many applicants first think about their most significant accomplishments. If you have led troops in battle or started a nonprofit, you may think you have this essay in the bag. That is the first trap of this subtle question. A “defining experience” is not necessarily one that results in achievement relative to peers. In fact, some of the strongest essays focus on monumental failures. Sometimes focusing on a failure actually allows you to answer the question more easily. Many people fail to reflect on their weaknesses and to delve deeply enough into the lessons they have learned. I assure you, you do not have to be Superman to get into business school. Reveal a little of your Clark Kent side. In doing so, you will not only address each component of the essay topic but you will also, and more importantly, become a more interesting applicant. There is no particular calculus behind what type of anecdote to pick. Just dig deep. Be introspective. Find an anecdote that describes what makes you unique as a person and a leader. Find that story that talks about how you developed into who you are today. Then tell that story with passion. Explain both your actions and thought processes. Leave the reader with a deep understanding of your motivations, character, and goals. If you choose to focus on an accomplishment, this essay can be a great opportunity for you to add color to something that does not jump off your resume. Though while adding color, make sure you leaven it with humility. Arrogance is one trait that the admissions staff willnot appreciate. —Zachary Surak